Crow Angel
Their calls rip through the air after they’ve gone.
I’ve pieced together an opera cloak
from their fallen feathers,
lined it with clouds and swathes
of midnight sky. I fly by your window.
Can you hear my cries?
Days when birds abandon trees
I comb the grass for feathers.
My cloak is black as a vanished star,
You’ll see me from afar, above a crowded
opera house, soaring
in time with Exsultate, Jubilate.
Voices lift me to a ceiling
as frothy white as a wedding cake.
It is shining with the tears
of all the arias.
Days when birds abandon trees
I comb the grass for feathers.
Crows flap their wings in my chest.
I twirl in the space above you,
my torso a treble clef,
my legs quarter notes, darker than soot.
Join me in this shadow dance,
my cloak is large enough for two,
but if you doubt me, I’ll gather
some feathers for you – on those days
when birds abandon trees, I’ll comb the grass, for you.
***
The prompt this week at Read write Poem is to write a bop using donated lines as the refrain. My refrain comes from Jillypoet. Birds are a leitmotif in many of Jill’s poems, and I thank her for sharing her perspective on them with me.
By the way, Jill has two new poems up at Mannequin Envy.
*Alleluja – Exsultate, Jubilate is an aria by Mozart. If you haven’t heard Kathleen Battle sing it, listen here.
This is exquisite, C. An absolute pleasure to read.
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Absolutely fantastic. Really amazing work, beautiful.
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Thanks, friends, 🙂
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Hi Christine,
Thanks for visiting my blog and for all the comments
dew drop by anytime..
anyway this one is fantabulous (fantastic and fabulous) (^_^)
loved it!
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Oh, goodness. This is fantastic. I love it. I love the idea of crows singing arias. Love it.
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deb and rm: 🙂
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the dreamlike quality of this is wonderful. i love that quality in your work.
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I also really like the dreamlike quality of this. Beautiful.
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Thanks, guys. I thought Jill’s refrain was so imaginative. And then right before I went to sleep I wrote a sentence: make a dress out of crow feathers. So that went into my poem.
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while i have no idea exactly what the motivation is for this piece,, i can imagine you reading it to me and the flow of the words is near hypnotic… as always my pleasure christine.
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I guess my motivation to write the poem came from Jill’s refrain.
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Enjoyed this especially your closing line. Like the sound and sense of it.
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Thanks, Susan. I will get over to read yours too.
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Wow. Visually beautiful. Nice use of the refrain, too.
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Oh, I love it! I especially love that last stanza and how you echo but change the refrain in the end. Wonderful work!
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Thanks, Julie. I was thinking of it as a sort of song, like a weird love song. I almost called it ” crowing my love.”
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Amazing the opera cloak is like a magic cape, you fly, you soar, you twirl!
And the Aria… Wow!
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Oh, these images. How they tremble. From whence do you capture them. I listen:
My cloak is black as a vanished star,
my torso a treble clef,
my legs quarter notes, darker than soot.
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Will you send me your password Christine? berylbissell@boreal.org. Thanks.
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A glorious swirling piece, underpinned by a sense of myth and ritual.
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I’m so happy you used my lines! The magical realism in this poem is great! I half expect to look outside and see a crow-cloak flying by. The movement and the music work well together, too. “Crows flap their wings in my chest,” is my favorite line!
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and yes, it IS like a love song!
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you put this together so well!! the imagery is magnificent!
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I am co-editing an anthology of Bop Poems with the creator of the form. Please do send in your Bop Poems.
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The website with the Call to Submit your Bop Poems is: http://bopstrutdance.blogspot.com/2010/04/bop-strut-dance-call-for-submissions.html
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Hey, thanks so much, these are beautiful!
Great job! :]
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My name is Suzy Perkins,
I love mikole misigner
she is my wife, but i am a women,
people think it’s wrong,
but we share our feelings using poetry,
which we find helpful mending the hardships the world gives us.
Love foever
suzy and mikole
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